Thanks for the insight into your literary accomplishments, Gods Messenger.

Some friendly advice: find out what is meant by the word cliché, then try very hard to avoid using them in your writing. But, more importantly: show, don't tell.

http://www.dailywritingtips.com/show-dont-tell/

Above all, don't be discouraged. Writing is something that improves with constant exercise, coupled with a growing understanding of the world around us.

Incidentally, you truncated the URL - the full link to your work is

http://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/1254309-The-Gospel-According-to-Patrick

Have a great day.

DEAR GM IM UNABLE TO FIGURE OUt THE WWW link
THIS IS You[i think]
http://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/1254309-The-Gospel-According-to-Patrick

BUT THE LINK IS WHAT IT IS
HERE IS ANOTHER LINK..RE THE MOTHER OF JESUS [THE CHRIST]..

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Our_Lady_of_F%C3%A1tima
YES..MAry/the mothER OF JESUS[NOT GOD]..BRIEFLY RETURNED AT FATIMA
TRYING TO HEAD OFF THE MURDER BY THE BOLCHOVICS..OF MAny of her sonS FOLLOWERS.

even jesus RETURNED BRIEFLY IN THE 60'S..to have dictated and written down the acim..[a course in miracles]
http://miraclevision.com/acim/urtext/acim-urtext-2003-upe-ready-edition.pdf

in 1996 i met with the 7 th angel..[WHO TOLD ME GOD IS ENERGY/THAT ALL LIFE LIVING And logic..is sustained via her sun..[our sun][THE SUN]..who did a pole flip..two days before new year
http://www.google.com.au/search?q=sun+pole+flip&ie

do you recall the saying of hell fire?

[that hell is surrounded by a ring of fire/...look at the fire IN THE SKY..THATS HELL...THE PASSIONS OF Hell sustain liFE ITS LIVING..but for the sun..there would be no earth.

ANYHOW GOD HAS SENT US MANY MESSANGERS
ANYHOW..YOUR POEM CAPTURED JOSEPH..mind set
as for mary/..SHE FELT..Our beloved christ move..months earlier[anD our brother..michaeL HAD INFORMED..JOSEPH..THAT IT WAS A BOY
http://www.google.com.au/search?q=mary+was+TOLD+son&

So that wasnt IN DISpute..[a messiah was expected]
even jesus thought it was to be john[AFTER all..the parents were OLd/john was coNCIEVED..AT THE RIGHT TIME..AND MOTHERD BY A VERY OLD HIGH PRIEST..ETC..NEVER THE less it was jesus

but then

recall you shall call him..emmanuel..[god within us all]

ANYhow my brother a worthy thought..but the thought of a man
[try to see the story..from josephs sidE..THATS THE BIGGER MESSAGE

ANYHOW..WELL SAID..
[GOD HAS SENT MANKIND MANY MESSENGERS COMFORTERS AND other]
welcome to the many..who open our hearts to those..beyond the veil.

keep the love
[have you read THE GOSP[IL OF thomas?..
http://www.google.com.au/search?q=GOSPEL+OF+THOMAS+JESUS+SPAKE&

this reveals jesus spake as a babe..defending his mother..after ill words were GIVEN..when she prESENTED HIM..GAVE HIM TO THE WORLD.

ANYHOW..I SEE AND WELCOME A FELLOW MESSENGER
WE are only asked to release aLL EGO AND AngeR..AS OUR BELOVED christ said..LOVE GOD BY LOVING OTHER..[ALL OTHER]..ALL LIVING COMES FROM GOD

BetweeN PERICULES AND I HE Would be the better messenger[bUT HE..I THINK..DONT GO for that sort oF THING]..but has A GREAT HEART AS WELL AS A SOUND MIND/plus the word skills..BUT BACK TO TOPIC.

FOR AUSTRALIA TO 'BECOME NEUTRAL ..IS IMPOSABLE[BECAUSE ITS ESSENTIALLY A DEAD FICTION/CREATED..BY AUTHOR's..TO IMPLY AUTHORITY

its explained here quite effectively
http://constitution.org/c5/

from the link

<<..Don't despair

Keep in mind..that legal practices everywhere..are corrupt and incompetent..in various ways..and to varying degrees,..and always have been,..but it makes a difference..in what ways/and to what degree,..and it requires a continual*struggle..by good people to reduce corruption..and incompetence..[to the extent/that can be done.RECALL..WHO'S..REALM/THIS is.]

The legal-system..is imperfect,..but violence..is likely to/be worse, so it..is usually better..to give the legal system..*a chance to work before*..resorting to other alternatives,..although for some issues you will*need..to go directly/to the electoral process.[but/KARMA..ONLY..RE-BALANCES].

We urge you..to regularly devote/some part of your time..and resources..to trying to get..the legal system to produce/just outcomes,..not only for yourself..but for everyone else,..but..also to be prepared..to resort to extrajudicial methods,..such as educating..and organizing/the public,..lobbying,..and working to elect constitutionalists.

ANYHOW WELL DONE..FOR THE TOPIC..DEAR BROTHER*
JESUS WILL BE PLEASED..WITH YOUr..works and your words

the uni-veRSE BELONGS TO..ITS LIVING Loving creator..[the holy-spirit]
OUR GOD =THE SUN..BUt see the heavens is full of sun..ONE DAY EACH sun of the father ..will have/theIR OWN..'LET THERE BE LIGHT' MOMENT..JUST LIKE ANA HAS..[Alpha/negative=alpha]

REGARDLESS..OF what we say think or do..where live is there is god
where love is there is god/where truth is there is god..wheRE CHARITY GRACE MERCY IS..THERE IS GOD..[whether called or chosen..we will know them BY THEIR WORKS..NOT..WORDS]onE GOOD DEED OUTWEIGHS A life time of good works]

that wE..DO [did]..to the least..we did to him

WELL MAY WE SAY...AHHHH MEN*
its not ouR SMALLNESS WE FEAR..BUT THE GREATNESS..[SUSTAINING US=all..OUR LIVES livings..from..WITHIN]..us all..[big or SMALL GOD ALONE LOVES US ALL..]WE NEED TO CHOSE SIMPLY TO SERVE LOve/life logic/LIVING [light..orCHOSE to serve darknESS DEATH WAR [MANS LAW..]

but mans law..declared war on me/my..people
[im only ONE..undeR GODS LAWS]

we are many..gods laws..are few/but his laws are true
[unless adulterated..into mans..statuted/personhood/laws]

correction..[FORGIVE MY CLAY fingers]

onE GOOD DEED*..DONE..FOR OTHER
OUTWEIGHS A life time of good words..

thAT..WERNT TAlking to everyone
[whO IS NOT A CHILD OF THE FATHER..[WHO NOT SUSTAINED THEIR LIFE OF god?..grace/MERCY..alone?]

MY MEssenger brother..dont loose heart[ITS ALWAYS DARKEST BEFORE THE DAWN...GOD HAS SENT US A..COMFORTER..HIS NAME IS ALEX JONES

http://rss.infowars.com/20140110_Fri_Alex.mp3

HE HAS PUT FORWARDS..THE PLAN..IN TODAYS SHOW
its about GETTING RID OF LAWYERS IN GOVT MAKING LAWS FOR LAWYER JUDGES

govt needs REALLY be BY THE PEOPLE[liviNG]
FOR THE LIVING/CURRENTLY IS THE DEAD FICTIONS SERVING THE DEAD/corperate person/HOODS..BY THE TRUSTEES OF THe created trusts/states etc

that..created under the act..thus judged..to be only under the act..[govt acts create dead fictions..called 'persons']..

BUT THE LIVING LIVE ONLY UNDEr god alone.
but the dead [banks]think bailouts of TOO BIG TO FAIL/corperatioNS..
ARE dead..created only under govt act..thats the legal person-hood[dead personum fiction]

pericules could say it much better
BUT THIS way..freewill remains sacrosanct.

Thank you for your comments
You are all invited to contribute.

The law as suggested only suits those who write it mostly on behalf of others.

As these people get more qualified and more experienced in life legislation is becoming covert in its essence .

I am and do stand against this type of issue but it's very difficult in a society that creates corruption at a high level as the norm.

Now that I have established lets say my credentials I would like us to go back to the subject of the post.

It might be said that Australia is the land of the future and is referred to in my story.

at this time we have a chance to both influenza and change the future but we have to stand together.

When our Government takes an action that is in effect takes us to the killing fields of war it is done in the name of each and everyone of us and the problem is we just sit back and let it happen.

Therefore we are all guilty of murder and killing.

I know what I want and that is for government and public servants to be held accountable for their actions. After all we as a people supposed to look up to them.

But we all know that's impossible.
One person in Australia can make the decision to go to war.
One person.
This should not be allowed to continue.